Ni Hao Bloggers!
Today I had to write a few sentences or a short paragraph about Thunder. I wrote down my ideas then I started writing. I started thinking of what I would see or hear if I were to be caught in a thunder storm. I started writing about the sky first, Then I wrote about the lighting, I added a similie. I wrote down 4 sentences. Once I was done with writing all that. I read my writing to make sure it made sence, I reread it just incase, I noticed that in some places I added 2 spaces.
Here is my writing.
Kia ora Mina! I really enjoyed reading your descriptive writing. The storm sounds like it came on very suddenly and as I read your writing I could imagine the events unfolding quite quickly. Well done for using a simile and onomatopoeia in your writing. I like that you also checked your writing and noticed some mistakes, which I see you have corrected! Great work! I hope to see you use some onomatopoeia during writing once when we return to school.
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